I need your opinions!

Please read the following short essay and let me know what you think of it. I have to write two short essays (limit of 4150 characters each) for my Alternate Route to Certification (for teaching) application. The first answers the question "Why do you want to become a teacher at this point in your life?" The second is "What strengths and skills will you bring to teaching?" and boy am I having trouble with this one as it is one of my weaknesses in not being able to talk about my strengths and skills.

What I am asking is for you to read the short essay that I wrote in answer of the first question. Here goes:

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Thank you in advance for taking the time to go over it and making comments. Hopefully I can get through the next question as well.